Kia ora,
This is my speech. We all had to present our speech to the class. I think that my speed and volume was really good. I also think that I wrote my speech pretty well. I think that to improve my speech I could make my conclusion a bit better and memorise my speech so I can look up more when I perform it.
Tuesday, 13 August 2019
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Hi there, my name is Georgia and I am a student in Hub Mako at Gisint. I really like your topic because it keeped me interested. Your work made me think of what I did because we have done the same activity. Have you thought about how you could make your presentation better, you could look up and speak louder. If you would like to see my work go to https://gisintgeorgiar.blogspot.com/
ReplyDeleteThank you for taking time to look at my blog. I agree with you feedback and have taken it onboard.
DeleteFrom Hannah your bestie ;
Hi Hannah,
ReplyDeleteI'm Perle from LH3. I really like how you wrote your speech. It flowed nicely and you had lots of great facts to backup your ideas. It made me think of my speech which was quite similar. I wrote about why we all need to exercise. I noticed that we both got information from the website, healthline. I thought that when you presented your speech to the class you could've looked up a bit more and engage with the audience a bit more.
Overall, I think this is a fantastic speech and you delivered it very well.
From Perle:)
Thank you Perle, your feedback was much appriciated.
DeleteHannah your bestie ;)
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ReplyDeleteHi Hannah, I'm Christian from Saint Patrick's School in Panmure, thank you for sharing tips about why kids should play team sport, I personally think that I could use to show my friends who doesn't like sports.
ReplyDeleteThank you Christian,
DeleteI hope my speech will be able to persuade your friends to play a team sport.
Hi Hannah
ReplyDeleteGreat speech. A nice way to improve the speech a little bit would be to buy chocolate for your Dad.
Kind Regards
Your Dad
Thanks Dad,
DeleteI don't think that buying you chocolate will improve my speech. Can you please comment something more mature next time.
Love your daughter,
Hannah
Ki Ora Hannah,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Angelina and I am currently attending Saint Patrick's School here in Panmure Auckland. I also believe that every kid should participate in a team sport for their health and well being. I like to play Rugby and Netball in my own time. I really like the way you stated your reasons for why every kid should play a team sport.Do you play in a Team sport? If you would like to see my learning my blog is http://spsangelinat.blogspot.com/
Hi Anglelina,
ReplyDeleteThanks for taking time to comment on my blog and give me some feedback. I play two team sports, Soccer and Hockey. I used to play netball but have never played rugby.
From Hannah
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ReplyDeleteHi Hannah,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Ida and I am currently attending Saint Patrick's school in Panmure Auckland. I also think that every child should participate in a game or a sport team because it is good for their health. I like to play Volleyball and Cricket in my own time. I really like how you had given many reasons on why each kid should play in a team sport because it is a good subject to talk about. Overall this is a good speech. Quick Question. Do you play in a Sport Team?
If you would like to see my blog here is the link: https://spsidaliahm.blogspot.com/
Hi Ida,
ReplyDeleteThanks for your feedback. Yes I do play team sports, I play hockey and soccer. I have tried volleyball but have never tried cricket.
Thanks
Hannah