Friday 16 March 2018

Duathlon



Success Criteria:
  • It makes sense when I read it
  • I have used capital letters and full stops correctly
  • I have had my blogging buddy check my blog before I publish it

LI: I am sharing some of my ideas, feelings and thoughts on my blog about the Duathlon today!

  1. I had to run 3 laps to start, 2 laps bike and 2 laps run.
  2. I came 3rd.
  3. I was so exhausted.
  4. It was really hard.
  5. I was so proud of myself.

It was a warm, sunny Wednesday morning, 30 year 6 girls lined up nervously. "On your marks," Bang. We all sprinted. I ran 1 lap of the field, two more to go, I thought. Everyone was cheering. I finished the 3 laps and sprinted up to the bike transition. I put my helmet on and and ran my bike to the the entrance of the field. Then I hopped on to my bike.

I started biking as fast as I could, I passed 3 people. I finished my first lap, then I did my 2nd. I past` 2 people. I got to the exit of the field, hopped of my bike, went down the curb, then I hopped back on my bike and rode hard out back to the transition. Then I dumped my bike and my helmet down, then sprinted the last two laps.

I ran as fast as I could, I was currently in 4th place. I sprinted and passed my friend, and ran ahead of her, I dropped up to 3rd place, I finished the first lap and started the second. I sprinted the whole way. I sprinted to the finish line, I crossed it in 3rd place. I was so happy!







2 comments:

  1. Hi Hannah,

    I enjoyed reading how happy your hard work during the race ensured that you came 3rd - yeha!!

    Who was your buddy? Did they read through this before publishing? Some words made it confusing when I read this...'past'.....also - as the reader what can you use to let me know that the person in the story is speaking eg On your marks, Bang....can you please edit this for me?

    Thanks
    Storm :)

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    1. Thank you for your feedback Koka Storm!

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